- The darkness was broken by several streaks of lightning as a girl slipped silently out into the rain, a dagger in her hand. Water dripped down her face and mixed with her tears. She cried out and fell to her knees as thunder shook the earth. "How could you do this to me?!" she screamed at the sky "How could you leave me?" her voice cracked and she looked down at the dagger in her hand. Her vision was blurred by the tears and rain as she whispered "But I will join you soon, my love". Slowly she got to her feet and lifted the dagger, holding it out away from her chest. She closed her eyes as lightning shot through the sky once more. Memories of her love ran though her head and a smiled appeared on her lips as she brought the dagger down fast and hard. She gasped as the blade sank into her chest and pierced her heart. Thunder rolled as she sank to the ground and her heart sputtered to a stop.
- by Sexy_Angel_of_Love116 |
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- Title: For love
- Artist: Sexy_Angel_of_Love116
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Description:
A girl lost her boyfriend in an accident and has given up after three months. Without anyone to turn to, she dose not know what else to do. He was the only person she had left in her life after losing her parents four years earlier.
I'm sorry the description isn't longer and my punctuation is bad. Please tell me what you think and how I can improve it. - Date: 02/02/2011
- Tags: love death
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Sexy_Angel_of_Love116 - 09/04/2011
- Hehe yeah I noticed that a while back but i didn't know I could change it. Thank you for telling me though =)
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- Superdyl21 - 09/04/2011
- its a realy good peice of writing but i noticed a mistake in it when shes smiles it says "a smiled apeared oin her lips" just sugesting you fix that but its realy good still giving 5/5 this is from one writer to another
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- Sexy_Angel_of_Love116 - 02/19/2011
- =) thank you.
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- defying insanity - 02/19/2011
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very and i mean very VERY touching
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- Sexy_Angel_of_Love116 - 02/03/2011
- Thanks =). I have read it before. it's an awesome book smile
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- BittaxSweet - 02/03/2011
- Aw :'( poor girl. Good writings, but you may want to revel some of the memories she's think about, and maybe show how agonizing it is to think of him while dead. Still great I give 5/5 oh and if you enjoy this kind of stuff, you should read Kissed by an Angel smile
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