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i took a walk down a path i thought was good
but when i went down i found there was no such luck
as i was dragged down this horrible hell like path
i wanted to give up, i want to give up.
As i wallowed in this place of darkness
a place i cannot name
i felt like life had given up
i felt like i was insane
until from the darkness
i saw a shining light
i saw a figure imerge
twas an angel, twas a sight
she pciked me up from my defeated knees
and told me to get a grip
she told me to be happy
i said i couldn't
she looked at me with disapointment
she picked me up and slapped me round
and she said
"happyness is for those who believe"
as she looked at me with anger
i knew she ment well
i saw this as a wake up call
i had to get out of this hell
she walked off with a smile
and said you decide what happens to your life
i picked myself up with her words in my heart
as i headed for my path
i as i speak now
i am still on my path striving for happyness
but whoever reads this know
that when you fall dont give up
you must pick yourself up and keep going
and remember
"happyness is for those who believe"
- Title: your own path
- Artist: sai888
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i dedicate this poem to my best friend without her kindness her loving and caring self i would never had gotten though my depression it makes me feel how lucky i am to have her as my bst friend. she is the one i can turn to when everything falls to pieces.
thank you so much bridie
(sorry if the poem isnt very good, never was the best person in creative writting)
(also im not sure if its a poem anymore its more of advice as it gets to the end but i have to say what i have to say) - Date: 12/10/2008
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Comments (5 Comments)
- sai888 - 01/19/2009
- thanks for the advice i will bare that in mind next time i write a poem
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- l_Shamrock_l - 01/13/2009
- I like the idea behind the poem, and it's phrased quite well. The only advice I have for you is to work on your rhyme scheme: Watch your beats per line to make the poem flow more fluidly. It can sound much better wink
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- vanjoy - 12/10/2008
- whee
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- ReiRei_o - 12/10/2008
- awhh this is so sweet whoever your best friend is shes a lucky girl ;D hahah x x
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