u broke my heart

• Artist: Ninja sasuke uchiha 1
• Description: i wrote this cause my gf dumd me hope u like it
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: lovehurts

u broke my heart by saying no
u broke my heart by saying no way
u broke my heart by saying get away
u broke my heart by ending a great day
u broke my heart i am not ok
u broke my heart but i will still love u anyway

Comments

[demon strait outta_hell]

I unfortunately agree with ryan.... you could stand to add a few words to it.

[SomeAnotherDay]

Kool, I like it.

[Ryan Russell]

I think the first two lines are WAY too similar. Try extending the poem a bit between the two lines, or find a substitute to the line altogether.

[catty_girl_09]

I like it, it's cute...but I do dislike the lack of words. "u" is not "you". It is a letter, not a word...so you shall not receive a good rating from me...

[magikhawk]

try a different rhyme instead of way and way. and perhaps pull the Still out of the last line it throws off your meter, but not bad, just little things

[Xx_iNatRal_Xpressionz_xX]

ooh I do like it