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Warning:Their will be some foul language in this story.
Gangsta-Girl:Hi people please enjoy my first story.
Rin,Ayame,Kagome,Sango,Sesshomaru,Kouga,Inuyasha,Miruko:Yah!You will love it!
Disclaimer: None of these characters, nor the universe they inhabit, belong to me, and I'm making no money off this, so please don't sue me, thank you kindly.
Chapter 1-The Gangsta Girl
Rin Sakura,Ayame Koshina are in a all girl gangsta called Dark gangsta boy wasn't afraid of these two and Ayame go to Shikon High School and they are treated like they are no Rin,Ayame got to school they saw someone getting picked on and of course they thought that she was okay so they next day when Rin,Ayame got to school that day their they saw that girl and someone else with her getting picked on.
Rin's POV
Yesterday I thought she was okay and now her and her friend are getting picked on.
"Hey Ayame"I whispered.
"Yeah Rin""What?"Ayame whispered back.
"Do you think they will be okay"I whispered back
"I don't think so Rin""Why Rin?""Do you think we should do something about then"She whispered back.
"Yeah I am getting tired of them picking on people who don't obey like were picking on us before like that too.""I think we should show them"I whispered back.
"Show them what?""Our asses"She whispered to me.
"No silly"I whispered.
"Then show them what?"She ask while whispering.
"Show them not to mess with people"I whispered back to her.
"Like what?""Do you mean fighting them"She asked and curious and whispering at the same time.
"Yes I mean fighting them."I whispered back to her
Sorry for making it sooooo short,but I do plan to make chapters.
Warning:Their will be some foul language in this story.
Gangsta-Girl:Hi people We have a special guests today with us here!
Rin:Hi people!
Gangsta girl:Hey Rin!But in this story you will be a 're so KAWAII(Hugs Rin)
Sesshomaru sad Growl)Step off my woman!
Me:Why should I?
Sesshomaru:Because if you don't I will rip you apart from head to toe!
Me:RIN!
Rin:Yes Gangsta girl
Me:Rin Sesshomaru is being mean to me saying this,but I rather whisper it to you instead
Rin surprised kay
Me:Come on Rin this way!
(somewhere far away where Sesshomaru can't smell Rin)
Rin surprised kay now tell me
Me:Sesshomaru was saying this when I was hugging you
Rin surprised kay go on
Me:Sesshomaru said sad Growl)Step off my woman! and then I said why should I?And then he said this to me in a very very harsh tone Because if you don't I will rip you apart from head to toe!
Rin:Oh really
Me:you don't believe me do you?
Rin:Yes i do believe you
Me: really
Rin:yes now I will talk to him about that later okay
Me surprised k
Me:Rin can you do the disclaimer
Rin:Sure!Gangsta-Girl-Yuki doesn't own InuYasha at all!
Chapter 2-The Fight
Rin's POV
"Then lets kick their asses"Ayame whispered back to me.
"Yeah lets kick them so hard in their a** that its gotta hurt soo bad"I whisper back to her.
Ayame's POV
"Are you ready Aya?"Rin whispered me.
"Yeah I am ready Rinny"I whispered her back.
"okay lets do this"Rin whispered to me.
"Yeah"I whispered back.
We started walking and all of a sudden we bumped into one of the guys that was picking on those girls.
They started shouting at us.I felt like I going to I looked at Rin and she look so calm,but sooner or later she will there and now I had just exploded and looked pissed off.
They just looked at me and started laughing at me.I could feel my demon blood start to boil and thats the bad thing because my eyes started turning red and boy I soooo pissed off its not even they just keep laughing at me.
"What is soo funny to you?"I said more like yelling at them.
"(chuckling)You think you can kick our asses"One of them said.
"Really Jackass""I think you didn't notice that I am full wolf demon"I said to him.
Then the laughing stop and he looked at her
"So girls are weak which mean you are weak too"The other guy said to me.
Rin's POV
Thats when I saw Ayame fighting that guy.
"Hey it looks like you are having a hard time attacking her"I said to the guy that Ayame was looked at me.
"So at least she is stronger than you b***h"He said to me.
"Yeah he has a point b***h"The other guy said to me.
Thats when Ayame started attacking the guys she was looked at me because I was fixing to she went back to fighting again.
"You are a stupid little b***h who can't fight at all"The guy that wasn't fighting Ayame said that to me.
Right then I had exploded right was I ever pissed off.
"LOOK HERE LITTLE BOY I AM NOT GOING TO DEAL WITH YOUR LITTLE s**t""YOU THINK YOU ARE THE BEST,BUT YOU AREN'T AT ALL"I yelled at him in my gangsta looked at me and he just laugh at me.
"Thats it you are gonna die right no her today"I said to stopped laughing at me a looked at me.
"Oh really""You can't even kill me little hoe"He said to me.
"LITTLE HOE!"I yelled at him.
"Yeah you heard me b***h"He said to me.
I started by grabing his arm flung him into a tree and I walked over picked him up and threw him into the air and when he was coming down and jumped up and kicked him so hard he had blood come from the corner of his mouth and of course the principle Kaede was watching in Ayame flung the other guy and made him hit the tree then she threw her leafs at him and the leafs cut his when Principle Kaede came out of the school building and was walking right strait towards at that time we were help picking up the two girls that had gotten picked on.
Ayame's POV
"Are you alright"She asked this girl with long black hair in a pony tail.
"Yeah"she said.
"By the way my name is Sango Tajiya"What is yalls name "Sango asked.
"My name is Ayame Koshina"I told her.
"My name is Rin Sakura"Rin told her.
"What is your name"Rin ask as she looked at the girl with black hair.
"Oh I am soooo sorry""My name is Kagome Higirashi"Kagome said to me and Rin.
Hey do you want to join our gangsta gang?"Rin asked Sango and Kagome.
"Sure"Both of them said.
"What is it called?"They asked us.
"Its called the Dark Rose"I answered them.
"I made this gang up when I was in middle school"Rin said.
"Girls!""Why did you do that?"Principle Kaede asked.
"Because we didn't want these two girls go through what we had gone through and we got sick of those same boys who picked on us and now they were picking on them."Rin said to principle Kaede.
I will try to make more chapters as possible as I can.
- by Mistress Tanya Of Hell |
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- | Submitted on 02/05/2011 |
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- Title: Gangsta Girls
- Artist: Mistress Tanya Of Hell
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Description:
Warning:Their will be some foul language in this story.This is my very very first story ever.
Gangsta girl use to be my username on www.fanfiction.com - Date: 02/05/2011
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Hentaimom - 02/05/2011
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Even if you are only 13 and an underveloped writer there are certain rules that are applicable to all levels of writing.
Perhaps work on diction which seems to be a major concern.
It seemed to be that your were using foul language without and definite purpose but to put on a 'gangsta' act.
Given that you're young, it's clear that you were using that sort of language because you could since most 13 year olds don't speak like that.
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- Hentaimom - 02/05/2011
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Lacks finesse. You use 'b***h' in almost every spoken line. There's no reason behind that honestly it doesn't add to the story.
Most people don't care to read something that seems to be a conversation between characters, who are out of character, that's not even in the story.
More details, less one line 'paragraphs'. Don't use actions in ( ). Write them out.
It seems like a waste of time to write in two POV's. Unless there is a dynamic contrast between throught processes of each character.
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