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One Day A Princess Was Living In A Castle. She Had No King Or Parents. One Day The Princess Said "I Want A King! I Need Someone Who's Nice And Who Will Treat Me Right." She Went Out In The Night And Looked For A King At 12:00 Am. When She Went To The Lake She Found A Green Stone With Some Sort Of Green Ears Sticking Out. But When She Tapped Its Head. It Wasn't A Green Stone! It Was A Ogre. A BIG FAT OGRE The Ogre Said "Who Are You, And Why Have You Invaded My Lake?" The Princess Tried To Run. But The Ogre Grabbed Her!!!
She Screamed, She Yelped, She Yelled For Help. "Don't Worry" Said The Ogre "Im Nice. Would You Like To Come To My Castle?" "Well, OK" Said The Princess. The Ogre Carried Her Down To The Lake. It Was Gross And Smelled Funny. Later After They Had Dinner, The Ogre Said "Would You Like To Spend The Night?" The Princess Said "Sure" "Do you want to be an ogre?"
"No thank Yo- OW!" The Ogre Had Bit Her. She Said "Whats Wrong With You???"
But The Ogre Broght Her Too Bed. He Carried Her. She Smiled. "I'm Sor-MMM! MMM! MMM! Mmm! mmmmmmmm!!!!!!!!!!!" "your lips tasted like rotten fish! mmmmm" She Felt Funny In Her Stomach. Her DNA Began to Start Collapsing It Turned Into Ogre DNA. Green Slimy Ogre DNA. Once The Ogre DNA Mixed With The Blood And Turned Into Ogre DNA, She Let Go.
She Fell To The Floor On Her Knees, Put Her Hand In Front Of Her, Put One Hand Down. She Said "Whats Happening To Me???" Her Skin Started To Turn Green. Really Green. She Growed Bigger Teeth Her Ears Started To Disappear And New Ones Sprouted Her DNA Was Permanent, She Was Officaly An Ogre She'd Make The Most Of It By Having Sex And Getting Married And Having Kids, The End
- by lastgirlchange |
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- | Submitted on 06/07/2010 |
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- Title: Ogre Transformation
- Artist: lastgirlchange
- Description: i did my best on this its about a curse that goes on a princess forever
- Date: 06/07/2010
- Tags: ogre
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Comments (2 Comments)
- XxCOOKIE_MONSTERQXx - 07/09/2010
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- Rainbow Donkey Princess - 06/07/2010
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Well it needs a bit of revision.
Whenever someone else starts talking, it's a new paragraph. So the princess and the ogre wouldn't be talking in the same paragraph. Second off, don't capitalize every word in the sentance only proper nouns and the first letter of a sentence.
third off, exclaimation points make a story look cheesy so try only using them in quotes.
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