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as i walk down the sidewalk.and see my past oh the dread.iv'e seen things things i cant explain or figure out much. Ive seen weird darkness as i sleep i see visions of people dieing and awakening from the dead!whats this power i have i ask myself is it good or can it rise above me? im confused someone help! as i keep walking i see the bodies falling from the sky and landing i run and scream!their gone i think i sneak back out and see these creatures walking from above are my visions real!?!and they say my name as they come closer they sink into the ground again .
i fall to the ground and cry! why me i say why?their hands rise again and grab my legs no i scream wats happening?no no no!!! its to late for me ive gone to the darkness
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- | Submitted on 04/19/2010 |
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- Title: the darkness
- Artist: mgrudnik11
- Description: itsa story i wrote in about a quick amount of time its my inner darkness should i write a book comment
- Date: 04/19/2010
- Tags: darkness
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Comments (5 Comments)
- mgrudnik11 - 04/19/2010
- thx and ill consider it next time
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- Lord Forestheart - 04/19/2010
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It seems a bit...unorganized. Perhaps some extra punctuation and capitalization will attract more views.
Other than that, awesome. I like how the main character is dragged into "the darkness", and loving the fact that you have to decide what the Darkness is. Like, it could be a demonic force or simply insanity.
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- mgrudnik11 - 04/19/2010
- thx i think i did good for my first story
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- Destery-Kun - 04/19/2010
- aweseome ^^
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- mgrudnik11 - 04/19/2010
- i think i did well if u like it and think its good plz tell me if i should write a book plz thx
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