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The Mask's Come's Off {middles of the chapt close to the end}
"Do you wont to dance?" Zack's hand lifeted out for mines and he smerked. I whispered "I was only suppose be your date, I'm just your nanny" i fixed my mask as i whispered that. "So.." he got down on his knee's, to reach my level because i was sitting in the ballroom chair. "You got threw the entrance without no one noticing" he said, "plus, I just wanna thank you for excepting my invite" he said, I thought to myself, oh really and if I didnt you was gonna have your dad kick my butt, out of new york. And i got flying all the way back to michigan? no thank you, i open my mouth to speak. "No-" he cuts me off, "its a slow song" before i could say anything he pulls me to the dance floor.
The music was soft and slow, he grabbed my waist and lifted my hands to put arms over his shoulder. I really couldnt tell that we dancing or him holding me. Felt like I was floating on air, is that even possiable? Zack put's his cold lip on my neck, I think i got an adrealnele rush, because I never felt this way. The song was about to end, and when it we both looked up at each other. With our mask on, I pulled away from him as his friends hudled him and started to talk.
The masquerade was over, I standed in a corner and waited. "If you think you and zack are gonna last,just stop now?" a voice said, I turned around. Oh great his crazy ex; who tried suduce him. "You dont know that" I said, i tried sound like a teenager. because my adult voice sure kicked in since I've been here. "Really? I bet he told you all these fablous things! and then he's just gonna wanna sleep with you and be done" she said.
I started speak and ask is that what happened to you? but I didnt cause zack came over. And grabbed my arm and we walked away. We were walking to the limo, I had butterflys. AM I FALLING IN LOVE WITH MY NANNY CHILD?!?! i mean well im only 20 and he's 18. Is that a big deal? We finally arrive in the limo,the drivers off. "Thanks for coming again with me" zack said took off his mask.
I nodded "No problem" i smiled but then hid it. Zack moved closer, I gave him wtf are doing look. but he ignored it and came closer. "Kiss me..." he says his cold fresh breath hit me like a earthquake. "Zack...I'm your nanny, there's limit's" he smerked and "but there's no limit in love" he cam closer and then.............................
tell me what you think should i write the whole story in the arena by chapt or no?
- by artificialcupcakeXx |
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- | Submitted on 06/18/2009 |
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- Title: Nannies Whisper
- Artist: artificialcupcakeXx
- Description: This a brief detail on a nannie who fall's in love with boy she has to watch but the boy is 18 years old
- Date: 06/18/2009
- Tags: nannies whisper
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Killer of the King - 06/18/2009
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Work on spelling and sentence structure. But... Based on the story, I think it's great! I'd definetly read it based on this.
4/5 because of structure and spelling. - Report As Spam
- tutorial guy - 06/18/2009
- yes write it by chapter XD
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