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There I lay just soaking up the sun when that moment happened, the moment that changed my life.
Ugggg! Here he comes again. I am so tired of Mark. He’s such a bully. He’s been picking on people for years but I’m his latest goal. Me the nerd, of course. Even though I have these powers, I can’t fling him to Jupiter or melt him. It would draw too much attention.
Comments (3 Comments)
- Yushi-senpai - 06/05/2009
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haha- what an opening! in five short lines i already want to carry on-superb bit of characterisation of the narrato there, i cant wait to find out all about him
as for advice are you intending this as a dark story, centreing on this abuse and the exploration of this guys powers, or are you going to turn it into a kinda comedy with this nerd trying to keep his developing powers a secret with hilarious consequences- think about it now cos theres nothing worse then an indecisive author - Report As Spam
- zanezomon - 05/28/2009
- good idea!
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- Hinata o21 - 05/28/2009
- .... This is just a suggestion, try having some kind of tramatic experiance happen.
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