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The red lights flickered out side the window.
is this real? am i okay?
I felt the fire licking at my skin.
I released the curtain that had caught on fire.
the flames seemed to be curling around my feet.
mommy tolled me stay, so i fallowed her request .
I stood there knowing i would die but it was to late to flee to late to run.
I was almost was submerged in fire.
I felt the flames burning hot against my skin, pain.
I felt my life starting to slip away from me, it was like i was slipping from my body.
It felt cool against the fire that was burning me outside in.
Its hard being not noticed no one talking to you as if your a no one.
I sat down on the recliner in the corner of the room.
The windows of my old friends apartment lay open letting in the cool fresh air and the blinding light.
I rocked back and forth in the recliner impatient to here her soft velvety voice and her to walk in with a our favorite board game.
My emty heart felt like a burden in my chest.
"[] Why are the b.i.w opening so early?[]" i thought.
I know i cant live here forever no madder how much i like it here .
"[] I'll pick up a ride on a taxi []"
I stood up quickly and ran to the window across the room and closed the curtains.
"[] Lilly where are you? []" I said confused.
However I felt like she was right beside me.
I heard the sound off firetruck sirens as they zoomed by the three story apartment.
I poked my head out of my window and felt a fy go through me .
- I sighed-
I'm still not used to being dead thing.
The wind brushed the tops of the scattered trees in the small city
I still don't know if my mothers dead or not .
I had a feeling like.......someone was dieing.
I ran across the room in a scattered hurry .
I had to help them before they became like me, a no one.
I f you like it please say so and tell me what you think.
- by luna_soramohi |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 03/13/2009 |
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- Title: coven of the silver wolfs
- Artist: luna_soramohi
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Description:
this insiperation was from the fact i believe in sprits that when you die you become .....a ghost.
well that's what happened to 9 year old Allison.
and finds herself searching for a body.
its a OK ruff but i think i could improve i want people to comment and tell me whats unclear to you the reader.
this came from my head.... i think its a cool idea.
i am only 11 so i think im doing good =3
this is dedicated to my brother Shaney.
- Date: 03/13/2009
- Tags: coven silver wolfs
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Comments (1 Comments)
- Rebellious Mastermind - 03/13/2009
- wow. i cant wait for you to write more and send it to me! Thats great cuz, i love it. i dont think that there is anything bad that i could say about, so my "say bad things first, then good things" is outta the picture. The only think i noticed was a few typos, but you could still understand the reading. I love how descriptive that you are. Descriptive is always a good thing, but some books go over the top. Not this one.Its great. Keep up the good work *wink*
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