- there was once a woman whom lived in a lake,she was happy with her family,but one day her parents were killed because they were different,she cried and cried till one day her heart could stand it no longer,she told the towns people of what the humans were doing and said:WE MUST FIGHT TO SAVE OUR KIND!!!!!!!they went into battle and every one was killed except viora,she relaxed trying to ignore the wounds as she wispered to herself:this shall be my final resting place,but at least our fellow towns people and my parents can finaly rest in peace.
- by Kishin_Mistress |
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- | Submitted on 12/31/2008 |
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- Title: viora
- Artist: Kishin_Mistress
- Description: this story is about a woman from a lake named lady viora whom fights to save her kind!
- Date: 12/31/2008
- Tags: waterlady
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Comments (4 Comments)
- apollos_girl freind - 01/08/2009
- i think its pritty good,and you sound confident!hopeya get in 10th or more place!
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- Kishin_Mistress - 01/08/2009
- ...O.O,well even if i dont get good votes itleast i tried and i like it no matter wut votes you give me ill be ok
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- Zweit - 01/03/2009
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This sounds more like a quick snippit you murmur to a child when they ask you to tell a bed time story then an actual, well though out one. It lacks spelling, grammar and thought.
If you really want to make something of this story then I suggest you toss this and start fresh. Start from her life, how her parents were different, who she's fighting. - Report As Spam
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