Under 3 covers

• Artist: Cumlordjr
• Description: So a killer dude is the persons house, The Murderer has killed the persons Mum, and his sister.Is he next parrish?
  I might make second 1, if this is liked enough.
• Date: 12/21/2008
• Tags: under covers

Waiting... hiding... listening.
Suddenly i heard him come through the house.
He checked my mothers room.
My sisters.
Soon, the man discovered my room.
All i could do was panic, and think for the worst.
Suddenly the man walks away, maybe to the kitchen, or to so if the police heard or something.
So i hid under the three covers of my unprotective bed... waiting... just waiting.
Suddenly i heard him come back.
Stepped in my room stopped, walked toward my bed.
I could see him through the thin covers of my bed, he didn't show his face, he wore a mask.
Suddenly he looked down at my bed.
I didn't Make a sound.
He must have saw me.
He pulled out his big murderis butcher's knife.
I was scared, scared out of my mind.
Not knowing what was about to happen i got up and ran out... not smart idea.
He chased me down the hall.
I fell.
Suddenly he came up and just stood there menacingly wondering what he wanted to probably do to me.
I watched him, i noticed i had broke my ankle.
He just stood there, watching me, intimidating me, i wanted to run, but i couldn't.
Sitting waiting he watched, tared, and kinda laughed.
This murderer i wish would just finish me off.
He didn't so i crawled away only for him to follow.
I stared like a terrified god that had a gun pointed to it's head,and waited... nothing happened.
I knew he was trying to make me psycho pathic or something.
Suddenly he raised the butcher's knife....

Comments

[sabrina__luv]

it was good =D i liked it alots you should def make a second one 5/5 i wanted to know what happened =[ even if you don't make a second one you have to pm me to tell me what happened

[4evertrue]

Hmm, not bad on your first try.
You've got lots of ideas coming. This would work as a nice start towards building up the story. I would say to read it over a few times out loud word for word to make sure it what you wrote is what you mean. Also, try to add more details into it. There's lots happening but it's lacking some details and some .. consistency with the ideas. It's kinda choppy atm. But all in all, a good start. Keep it up =]