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Brooklyn sighed heavily as he watched the snowflakes fall to the ground. It never snow inside the gate; only outside it. It was a beautiful site however odd it may have been. He only wished Kel could have been there with him to see it. If only she had been around this Christmas to see the snow.
Brooklyn wondered around the town aimlessly, hands shoved in pockets to keep them warm. He had on earmuffs and a scarf, both of which were given to him by Kel, and a heavy coat. He stopped walking and stared up at the sky. The snow looked like stars falling slowly to their doom onto the frozen ground.
“I guess it really is pretty.” He mumbled. “Though, it is not so when it’s red instead of white.”
Brooklyn continued walking again. He watched as people passed and waved at him with a smile. That’s right. They have a reason to smile on such a wonderful night. They aren’t going to be alone on Christmas Eve or Christmas Day. Or any other family holiday in a year. Then again, he wasn’t going to hold a grudge against some one for something that they couldn’t help.
“Brooklyn,” A girl called. “Hey, Brooklyn! Stop for a second, would you?”
Brooklyn stopped. He turned around and faced the small girl. She was carrying a white box in her hand that had a green ribbon tied on it.
“Here,” She said almost breathlessly. “I went into the cake shop and the lady in there asked me to give this to you.”
“Thank… You.” Brooklyn replied, his sentence broken up.
The girl nodded and handed the box to Brooklyn before running off again. He figured she had a family to get homed to. They would probably sit around a fire and eat dinner together, laughing cheerily. He sighed heavily and headed toward the bakery. After all, he did live there.
However, this small little task seemed to get harder and harder as he continued. People kept stopping him and giving him boxes. It was to the point where he could no longer see where he was going.
“s**t.” He muttered. “I can’t see. Why the hell did everyone decide to start giving me all this stuff now?!”
Really, he didn’t mind getting all the gifts. It was just a bad time to give them to him. He slowly started moving again and took very cautious steps as he did so. One wrong step on a patch of ice and he’d fall and crack his head open on the brick below. Everyone seemed to have gone inside by now so he was alone in the dimly lit town.
Brooklyn paused in his walk and set things down on a bench before plopping down on it himself. He rested his hands on his lap and leaned back against the back of the bench, dropping his head back so the he was looking at the sky. The snow was now falling less than it had been before. A snowflake landed on his nose and he jumped. The ice cold little flake had startled him slightly.
“Kel loved the snow.” He mumbled as he sat up and stared at the ground. “She also loved pushing people into snow drifts. “
Brooklyn felt nostalgic as he lost himself to memories. He sat there, staring at the ground, when the door to the house in front of him opened, shining light from inside on him. Ellphie poked her head out the door and looked at Brooklyn.
“Mr. Brooklyn, come inside.” She smiled. “It’s far too cold for you to be out here and I’m sure you can’t eat all that food by yourself.”
Brooklyn looked at Ellphie and smiled. He went turned toward his stack of boxes and reached to pick them up when two pale hands grabbed a few of the boxes. Brooklyn looked up to see Caden standing there with a warm smile.
“You don’t think I’d let you carry these by yourself, did you?” Caden asked.
“Thanks, buddy.” Brooklyn replied. “I suppose I have no choice but to go inside now.”
Brooklyn grabbed the rest of the boxes and the two boys went inside. Ellphie closed the door behind them with a smile. Brooklyn wasn’t going to have a lonely Christmas after all. Though Kel would not be with him, he had his friends there and always would.
- by CalvinRexx |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/16/2008 |
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- Title: I'm Not Alone.
- Artist: CalvinRexx
- Description: Crappy oneshot I wrote for the Christmas holidays last year. It revolves around the death of one of my characters in a trilogy I'm writing. I suppose you could say it's a spoiler. Anyway, fear the angst and I know it's pretty bad.
- Date: 07/16/2008
- Tags: trilogy
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Yuffie07 - 10/05/2008
- This is truely amazing.
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- Ms Make Me Smile - 07/31/2008
- omg.i read this before i remember thinking it was good,i gave you 4/5. i forget where you lost the one star
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- Arisa Wilder - 07/16/2008
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Because I've fallen into the habit of giving constructive criticism, here it is:
So, there were some missed commas, and a few grammar errors. Also, it was a little repetitive (You used "He" to open sentances a lot). Finally, instead of telling us outright was he's wearing, try communicating the same information through actions. ;D
Other wise, you did a good job. biggrin - Report As Spam
- Lord Burandon - 07/16/2008
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Awe that is awesome story!
I would love to read more! - Report As Spam