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heart I was on my way to class when came across a note book that had a
thirteen on it. Inside a boys name was written, Jake withers. I saw his dorm
number thirteen on it and started to head there. As I was walking to his dorm
people stared at me I wondered what it was but dicided it was nothing. When
I got there I knocked on his door 13 times he opened the door. He was
gorgeous. "Hi, I found your note book by the fountain --- I need to ask you
something." He had inturrupted "okay?" He asked " Would you like to go out
tonight ?" he asked again "Sure, see you later!" I exclaimed.
"See ya roungd 8?" I asked "Sure see ya" He turned around and shut the
door all I heard from him that night was "YES!!!"
One year later.
I was stopped outside of jake's dorm, the familair sound of the tv wasn't
there. I knocked on the door twelve times, the thirteenth time the door
slowly creeped open. I looked on the floor, there was jake with bloody
tears streaked across his face. "No!" I shriek. I call 911 and they say
the paramedics are on the way. By then i'm crying I look on the white carpet,
little red droplets were comming off my face then it occurred to me that I was
crying blood!!!!!!! The next thing i know i'm falling into darkness no I whisper.
By the time the paramedics got there bella and jake were dead. They were
pronounced dead on febuary 13th.
They were brought together by a note book but torn apart by death. I geuss
it was just forbidden love.
- by xx-magentalvr-14-xx |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 09/14/2008 |
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- Title: forbidden love
- Artist: xx-magentalvr-14-xx
- Description: this is my own writing. i'm sorry about the artwork dilema so i'm doing this
- Date: 09/14/2008
- Tags: forbidden love
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Comments (2 Comments)
- linkinparkfan4evaz6 - 09/14/2008
- Uh I agree with psych_G. Not to be mean or anything, but I have had to blink a few times to see and understand what I was reading. @.@ I felt dizzy reading it.
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- PsychG - 09/14/2008
- Work on grammar and be more careful with spelling. Also, those parentheses don't have to be there at all. You could've easily put them in between comas and it would've flowed much better. Keep working on it.
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