battered and broken

• Artist: Unholy Spawn Zylus
• Description: devoted to the girl who to this day continues to break my heart
• Date: 08/09/2012
• Tags: battered broken

my heart sinks as i think of you
my one my only a love so true
i just want to hold you and make you mine
ill love you until the end of time


to feel your warmth
a loving embrace
to see a smile upon your face
a creature of beauty of incredible grace

a love like this time cannot erase
all of these feelings i have for you
all of them real all of them true
to act upon them my only wish

but you push me away for some one else
the posibilities we cannot explore
in your eyes we are friends forever more

id gladly do that for you my love
ill love you from afar
and pick you up when they break your heart
put together the peices as i always do

for thats how much i truly love you
your happiness is all i think of
if not with me then with some one else
just know ill always be waiting

in hopes that one day youll feel this way too
its probably hopless i must confess
but a devotion to you the ultimate test
without you my life certainly be a mess

Comments

[F3aroffalling]

It's a great peom, because it comes from the heart. My only advice is: capitilization and punction. It may be annoying and bothersome, but it makes your writing look better and more appealing. I use to do the same thing, trust me it's worth it. The only thing else I have to say is keep writing from your heart, and even if it's not popular, your writing will always be great.

[winter rain storm21]

your poem is beautiful it speaks to my heart I to have felt the same way you have.

[Unholy Spawn Zylus]

please comment id rather get comments then ratings im trying to become a better writer and i need feed back and pointers