Coldness in my heart

• Artist: marshe12
• Description: sad poem
• Date: 12/22/2010
• Tags: coldness heart

Can you hear my heart cry?
Can you feel my it beat?
My tears dont dry
All I see is you
Walking away
On the cold winter day
You leave me
In the cold
All Alone
You walked Away..

Comments

[Kimiko Owl-Rider]

I like it.
Reminds me suspiciously of Twilight though.
Also, you need to add some punctuation and there is a sentence you need to fix up.
For all that I give you 3/5.