When Christmas Comes

• Artist: Rheigne
• Description: When Christmas Comes is a thoughtful poem, that lets us think about what are our priorities in life and to look back on the year that has just passed us by.. :)
• Date: 12/05/2010
• Tags: christmas comes whenchristmascomes thoughtful nice

"WHEN CHRISTMAS COMES"

---- Rheigne

When Christmas come I often wonder,
When and how do people gather
Is it the same of what we do?
When everybody's dancing to the tune of the blues?

When Christmas comes, its supposed to be filled with joy
But what of those children who can't have toys?
Or enjoy a meal of bountiful table?
Will someone come and be their angel?

That ragged man across the street
Will he be able to fight the cold of that concrete?
Is someone gonna hand him some wheat?
When he's all alone on that cold seat?

When Christmas comes, what do you think about?
Is your heart sometimes filled with doubt?
That the year has gone and will not return
And there's something you think you haven't discerned.

What is the meaning of Christmas when it comes?
Is it just fun, party and drums?
Do you recollect your thoughts so you won't miss
Another chance to thank God for all this bliss?

Or do you think about the gifts, the money and the trips,
That you'd be spending on that holiday chips?
What is Christmas to you?
Tell me, what is it you do?

Comments

[Rheigne]

Thanks archenteron.. smile i should hire you..lol! biggrin

[archenteron]

person, who is going to hand somebody wheat? i can see you were going for rhyming sets there, but it sounds awkward) ... overall, it has good progression, you could work a little on the rhythm of the poem, but i think you make some valid points and it was a pretty good read.

[archenteron]

i do think it is a very thoughtful poem. it has good rhythm. some of the lines don't work out so much (this line in particular was a little too long: When Christmas comes, its supposed to be filled with joy
), there are some places where the rhymes sound a little forced (that set with the homeless

[archenteron]

there are a few grammatical problems (i'm sorry, i had to mention them because i noticed them, which made it distracting to read through; if you want me to proof-read or point them out let me know)