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The leaf
it falls and falls and falls to the crisp, chilled ground the ground that i -we once walked; now we are no longer walking on the ground together ;now so cold the air so loney so calm no one to talk to no one to love now u are gone soon i will join u soon my dear then i will be with u to talk to u ,to love u to
BE TOGETHER
the things we do for others - others we love
the things we do to be together - willing to suffer to see u
- by ShateredLife |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/12/2010 |
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- Title: to be together once again
- Artist: ShateredLife
- Description: soon i will join u soon my dear
- Date: 07/12/2010
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Comments (5 Comments)
- ShateredLife - 09/27/2010
- thank u
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- queen siva - 09/03/2010
- keep on practicing. i see you as a work in progress. in poetry, its too dramatic when you capatalize things like the "BE TOGETHER" it ruins the calm flow. keep trying im sure you'll be great one day.
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- ShateredLife - 07/20/2010
- thx i just typed idk where it came from ?!!
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- FieryHeartedAngel - 07/20/2010
- Mm, it was a fairly good piece of work. However, I would really consider spelling out the 'u' to 'you' and such, capitalize the I's, and some other minor details like that. It just makes reading entries more enjoyable that way in my opinion. Other than that, keep on practicing!
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- ShateredLife - 07/12/2010
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u can relate when u experence it
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