Our Love

• Artist: II December Rain II
• Description: Sad emo poem
• Date: 03/03/2010
• Tags: love goth sadness deppressing veryemo

Loves memory has traced our outline in this place.
But will the spider remember, or the sun?
Did the water capture our faces in permanence?
Does the wind create us anew as it blows?
Did the shadows from the trees record our passage beneath them?
Our secret been revealed.
Yet I have told no other.
I write these words in silence, in mute testimony
To what once was.
But our image remains alive in this place.
It can not be removed.
You, me,
We then,
Were here.
We saw the day and hoped for tomorrow.
We caught a brief glimpse of love's promise.
We were not liars,
But thieves of time.
For now time has now forgotten us,
Yet our memory lingers, and love remembers
This place that was ours.

Comments

[xI run with scissorsx]

I don't really get how your description has anything to do with the poem though the poem was great and I didn't get the whole you me we then part but besides that amazing

[nbetweener]

Pretty good. I'm not sure about "We were not liars,/But thieves of time./For now time has now forgotten us,"; it doesn't quite fit with the rest, and is a bit confusing. You write ; should that be "Our secret's been revealed"? I'm not sure quite what you're trying to say, so I can't pin down the error, or what feels like one.I like the overall idea, though.

[sora wonk]

for once the snark has died.
i agree. that's really beautiful. i agree.