dreaming of you

• Artist: DeAd_FROM_THE_StArT
• Description: to my gf ~ i lovez you
• Date: 02/19/2010
• Tags: dreaming

another night deprived of slumber
hours passing without number
because im thinking of you
and now the sky is turning blue

Comments

[Sam the Morningstar]

all I can say is don't feel like you have to stay with the rhyming. It's very constrictive and doesnt allow you to really emote

[DeAd_FROM_THE_StArT]

thanks for your constructive critisism i will take it well.....

[sora wonk]

another night deprived of slumber
hours passing without number
and not even spent having really hot fantasies
about a babelicious babe not wearing pant-asies
it's just insomnia, it's so freaking lame
so i write dumb reviews and wait for daybreak.
--needless to say i liked this poem