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I never said I blamed her,
You've got this story twisted.
Your story is becoming falser,
almost like the truth had not existed.
Why are you punishing me,
for helping another soul?
My nature is to help others see
and that is what I've done.
You've taken me for granted,
but it seems like you have won.
My life has been turned grey-ish,
and my sky is not so blue,
I will not change to selfish,
It is a life I never knew.
- by slothiiiey |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/18/2009 |
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- Title: A Life I Never Knew
- Artist: slothiiiey
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Description:
constructive criticism only please :3
- Date: 12/18/2009
- Tags: life never knew
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Comments (4 Comments)
- 1-800-URA-NOOB - 12/30/2009
- -claps- biggrin lol but my post is like andys so dont really need to post
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- xMGK_II A N D Y II_BSTx - 12/30/2009
- hmmm idk u kinda need to fix the rhythm a bit and its too dramatic lol but thats just me.
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- ElthiaDia - 12/19/2009
- nice
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- Wicked Lilith Thing - 12/18/2009
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Hello guildmate.
Your poem.. I like it a lot. There are tiny changes I would make for the sake of rhythm but it's really very good. - Report As Spam