Do I Dare

• Artist: writervsworld
• Description: wrote this for school. it's a villainelle (however u spell it) yay european poetry week!
• Date: 11/25/2009
• Tags: dare

Do I dare sleep on this vile southern clay
Of sinister reds and passionate browns?
Do I dare disregard another day

As an innocent morality play?
If I should cry, I would make too much sound.
Do I dare sleep on this vile southern clay?

How I wished to be part of the ballet,
But they persuaded me to buckle down.
Do I dare disregard another day

As my mind becomes ever disarray?
An unbroken soul intended to drown.
Do I dare sleep on this vile southern clay,

This filthy, stinking clay dwindling away?
I melted into the remorseful town.
Do I dare disregard another day

As we evanesce to a charcoal grey
And our deepest fears become renowned?
Do I dare sleep on this vile southern clay?
Do I dare disregard another day?

Comments

[CyborgAdair]

Really nice work! My only critique here is the line 'This filthy, stinking clay dwindling away?' seems a little bit too long in terms of syllables (clunky, maybe?) but otherwise your word choice was excellent.

[devil_broken_2]

very nice!!