Haiku

• Artist: Andrew636626
• Description: Day this was written: September 16, 2009 (Wednesday)
  Day posted: September 22, 1009 (Tuesday)
  
  I was just trying this out and was looking around on the bus when I wrote this in my notebook.
• Date: 09/22/2009
• Tags: haiku

Haiku

1.
The beautiful sun
Oh how wondrous
As we admire her

2.
The sun so blazing red
No one pays mind though
To the natural gift

3.
American corn grows
A school bus drives by
Rural and Urban meet

4.
A praying mantis rests
sitting on the green leaf
Boy disturbs him – bye bug

Comments

[Jesse The Eternal]

Nice poem you tried to keep it all the same amount of syllables.
But it was more then a normal haiku.

[UC Poika]

Nice try, but this is tanka at best. try 5-7-5 beats per line. I love hiaku but tanka is well, tanka Nice try though.