Dying and Crying

• Artist: xxP0IS0N-R0S3xx
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• Date: 08/29/2009
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I don't know what else to do
I keep falling back to you
Wish I knew what went wrong
Cause we were once so strong
Then everything just feel apart
Liked it better from the very start
If only time stood still
So we could get it right
To fix our mistakes
My only mistakes
Was letting you walk out my life
It was just too much pain
I couldn't take
Can we just start over
I don't want to keep feeling this way
I've lost instead of gain
I know were not perfect
But who is
I'm crying,bleeding and dying
Crying cause we both fell
Bleeding from the scars you left me
Dying cause your not here
This is real not a fairytale
Injury,misery into insanity
I'm breaking out
Breaking down
Now I've fallen
To the ground

Comments

[Sunafire]

Unoriginal, and far too stereotypical.
You need to add more depth, more structure and more diversity if you want your poetry to sound unlike other peoples.

I'm not being rude, just trying to help you improve biggrin