COFFEE POT LANDING

• Artist: UC Poika
• Description: Memories of how just hanging with firends is more special than most anything.
• Date: 08/13/2009
• Tags: coffee landing remembered

COFFEE POT LANDING
by UC Poika


we never put the coffee pot on the fire
never had a brat or a weenie roast
never landed a fishing boat or a canoe
and never even waded by the river bank
we didn’t talk of less than the fondest desires
we failed to share any of our proudest boasts
and never thought of that we might not lose
never complained but in everything gave thanks
for we were as the weather that comes
where the east wind winds
that rains but not so hard it’s cause for concern
which blows but not so much as to seem unkind
or shines amidst the clouds seeming to take turns
but we were happy weren’t we on our days away
at Coffee Pot Landing where the Mississippi plays.

Comments

[UC Poika]

To misquote Yugioh abridged version inaccurately to make my point to anyone who's willing to learn what loosening up is about, Screw the rules I have talent!

[UC Poika]

By the way you must really hate lyrical poetry that makes sense to a rocker world if you object to double negatives and punctuation problems. I never did understand you folks but I bet you listen to Bach and bock. Try living a little. Enjoy a shack as well as the Taj Mahal but don't tear either one down if you know what I mean which I doubt. It's like we're from different planets. I have no problem getting published and I take you don't either.

[UC Poika]

I can see where you might have trouble with the idea of having one) friends mature enough not to have to brag and two) getting along so comfortably with others you feel no need to brag. That's probably why I didn't write about you and you didn't write about your friends prof.

[ProfessorKC]

THis one could be great, but it gets confused in the middle- After the line ending in "desire" The fact that a bunch of friends sitting around didn't brag to each other is odd ... the line after that one:
"... and neverthought of that we might not lose ..." is a double negative and makes this section of the poem less sensible

I am praying for puctuation here , too. or even a break in phrasing like so

"that rains
but not so hard it's cause for concern ..."

Need some work still.

[FuriazFTW]

I didn't really understand the last line of the poem. Not one of your best works, but I think I understand what you're trying to express. I'm gonna rate this one a 3/5.