Just once

• Artist: moonprincess70
• Description: A poem dedicated to a special someone kinda emo but id love your imput on it!
• Date: 07/30/2009
• Tags: just once

I just want to see the sunrise once with you, and I’ll be happy
I want to watch it flit over the horizon
Lighting up the world

Over the mountains, or the sea
Or a city somewhere
I don’t care if I’m with you

I’ll lay in your arms and whisper
“How pretty”
And the world could slip away , I wouldn’t care

I’d die right there
In your arms that morning
And I wouldn’t cry a tear

Cause I had had that moment
The one moment I had wished for
And I had spent it,
With you

Comments

[Crestfallen Cosmo]

This is a good poem! It made me think of my special someone too. :3

[ProfessorKC]

It'd make a good greeting card. This could be so much more than just someone saying they love. Why the sunrise? Why not sunset? You focus on the being with someone and leave a bunch of questions as to why. It's a little cliche as well with the "die in your arms" piece. You can say old sayings like this in a new way and still mean the same thing, but keep the words in your piece from getting "dusty" ... sorry but ... no.

[XxilovethemusicxX]

thats beautiful i feel like crying right now good job keep it going :,(

[halo_star29]

that was beautiful it made me feel warm inside did you picture a beach when writing it because thats how it made me feel like im at a beach at sunset. I hope you two stay together wink

[kessia_baby]

i think that was beautiful. dont ever let anyone tell you otherwise.
and i mean that in a no homo kind of way ok.