"And There Was Hope"

• Artist: lDrake
• Description: A song i wrote. It's pretty much about dying and the afterlife.
  July 13th, 2009
• Date: 07/13/2009
• Tags: there hope song christian

July 13th, 2009

And There Was Hope

An arbitrary mindset
Condemns our life to this
Nothing there to live for
An empty abyss
Distorted thoughts of meaning
From which we turn away
The tattered pieces are
Beginning to fray

And death
Was all that remained
Even the willing
Refrained
And death
Persevered again
Killing the strongest
Of all men

Relentless allegations
Contribute to your fall
Nothing left to hold on to
No one hears your call
The piercing sounds of screaming
Echo in deaf ears
But God is waiting for you
The only one who hears

And death
Was all that remained
Even the willing
Refrained
And death
Persevered again
Killing the strongest
Of all men

But in their graves they rise
Look into my eyes
Death cannot condemn them
Look up to the skies
The departed are restarted
To live again anew
And their eyes search
And their words follow you

Comments

[lDrake]

Thank you very much :] I really appreciate it

[Kythe]

I'm commenting this because, out of the last 8-ish things I read in this arena, this one actually seemed significant, well structured, *and* well articulated. That being said, it also caught my interest and held it to the end, and afterward I felt like... well, I'd been entertained. If it could, it'd be a 4.5/5.

If you're craving Constructive Criticism, my two cents: You have talent. I'd suggest you just do more.