mom and dad

• Artist: bursting element
• Description: the story of my outlook on my raising
• Date: 06/03/2009
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dad and mom you done me wrong
i try so hard to be who u are
instead i get pain and mental scars
u through me around like a experiment
just do as u will like it didn't mean skit
this pain i have will stay for good and never go as it should
scared
for life by your words and hands
the pain is deep deep within
cant change the past its your fault you coudn't grasp

on to me like you do my soul
i ran and ran to show u all that i will not tolerate this anymore
you call me names putting me down
not no more when your flat on the grown
wandering how to get me back in witch you will never have
i am Gary and that's who i will be
no more scars or angry chills
you will never fill them thrills from me
just crawl in a whole and disappear quickly deep bellow
so i never see u or fill your soul
just the presence makes me sick u killed me before but not no more

Comments

[BloodyLaughter]

I love it. Filled with passion and it seemed written with your full extent. I am glad you posted this for many eyes to see and bare. I understand the feelings also, though. I am glad I could read a poem that meant you will get back up on your feet and not stay to the ground. Thanks!

[onionio]

I like your message and you seem to write with much passion but you lack basic grammar skills which made this piece difficult to read. The misspelled words and use of "u" instead of "you" were just irritating. Continue writing with strong emotions and work on your grammar.

[SuperCrazyChick666]

honestly, it's way better than any ive seen yet. and, to some extent, the way ive begun to feel about my mother. i have some poems ive written for her, but i post them in my journal. its public if you want to check it out.