Jawless Madam (a Senryu row)

• Artist: Bunai
• Description: I am quite fond of a dead-zombie look that I have created for my avatar. I finally submitted an Avatar entry of it (titled the same), after 2 years of not submitting any avatar.
  
  I came up with a "senryu" for it's description. Senryu are like Haiku, only not about seasons. A senryu is usually more loose on a subject and can be humorous, dark, or sad. etc. This senryu is about a murdered Wife and her corpse, which has been tossed out to the sea and washed up on the rocks next to it.
  
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• Date: 04/14/2009
• Tags: jawless madam senryu

once a wife of joy
a heartless corpse she was
said by her husband

far too much nagging
and tossed to the waters below
heavily weighted

companion of water
a cold body by the rocks
not by madams choice

sea she cannot see
no jaw, so no voice to say
"oh, how beautiful~!"

Comments

[Bunai]

Thank you for the comments.

[CrazyGravyGirl]

It's pretty good, I love the lack of capitalization and it does have a morbid feel [however it could always be more morbid ^.^] I especially liked the line "companion of water" - great work 5/5

[Expidered]

THATS SO...AMAZIN lol im speechless