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In dark lands with not but grief,
a trembling beneath our feet.
Quite first, but louder grew.
Brewed of memories of hate, it hue.
It hue a crack deep indeed,
down to the very core of me.
It tossed and turned me,
shook and burned me.
For their is one thing that I should tell,
these dark lands are me...
- by PyroOnFire1313 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/10/2009 |
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- Title: Dark Lands
- Artist: PyroOnFire1313
- Description: I would REALLY appreciate criticism both positive and negative, so PLEASE COMMENT.
- Date: 04/10/2009
- Tags: dark lands
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Spontaneously Spazgasmic - 12/13/2009
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It liked the flow of it and the word choice was fantastic =]
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- SilvertongueSagittarius - 07/09/2009
- it's not bad. a few typos but that's ok. it has an air that reminds one of E. A. Poe. It seems like there should be more to it though. Exellent vocabulary and imagery. over all, it's a good poem. 4/5. please comment back
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- Silencematters - 07/09/2009
- Wow this is realy well written, it kind of reminds me of those poems and songs you read in epic books like lord of the rings and eragon lol. Very well done and i like all of it. Keep writing, and please check out some of mine. Again very well written. 5/5
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- thesonofsteven - 04/13/2009
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That is truly mindblowing.
I have no negative critisism for it .
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