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The crimson darkness surrounds you and I
I let out an involuntary sigh
For I know the truth, the horrible truth
that the love I once knew was your crimson darness heart
coming through
- by mikamurder |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/26/2009 |
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- Title: Crimson Darkness Heart
- Artist: mikamurder
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Description:
hope you like,
its about me loving someone who doesn't love me back - Date: 03/26/2009
- Tags: crimson darkness
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Comments (1 Comments)
- 290DarkStars - 03/26/2009
- It has rythem...but no rhyme.You got the flow....but i diddn't really grasp the image. But after re-reading it I did like it.... It REALLY grows on you. Good job but try harder to use rhymes, stanzas, and order to your poetry. It makes it a lot mor...err....flowey. But 4/5 keep goin! Your almost to the glorious 5!
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