Waisting my time

• Artist: HERS_FOREVER
• Description: this is a song i wrote just because i was bored in school and it really means something to me
• Date: 03/19/2009
• Tags: unknown time

My life is gone
Now what will I do
Just lay around
And think of you
My time is out
And now your taken
I took to long
What was I thinkin'

chorus
I will get you back again
I don't want to be just friends
I need you and you need me
I 'm through wasting my time

Your life is gone
He never loved you
Nows my chance
To try and get you
Of course I failed
A fool I was makin'
I wrote this song
and started prayin'

chorus x2

My plan it worked
and now I have you
I'll try my best
Not to lose you
It didn't work
and now your gone
That is it
Now im done

Comments

[kana haruno]

COOL it was sweet and depresing it was great smile

[rocko11091]

i like what i see...from a poetic perspective, it could use a bit of work, but seeing as im not very much into lyrical work, i cant accredit myself with knowing exactly what im talking about...flow - nice, works well...style - not exactly my cup o tea, but to each his own...concept - ok, didnt really strike a chord with me... Figurative language/imagery - meh...not that great, need to include a bit more...
Concept: 3/5
Flow: 3/5
Style:2/5
Figurative language/imagery:1/5
Overall: 2.25/5 (2)

[bluechick1]

its really good

[xzoda girl]

wow nice i like it