You cut me open

• Artist: ElvenFalcon
• Description: MORE thoughts.
• Date: 03/17/2009
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Now I'm just mad!
How can you ignore me like this?
Are you really going to just ditch me?
I've ALWAYS been there for you

I've had my ups and downs ..
But hey, so have you!
So why is it suddenly all my fault?
You won't tell me what's wrong

Yesterday you told everyone you hated me
And you said I hated you
Even as I said
I don't hate you!
Over and over

Did you hear me?
No, of course not
You never hear me pray
You never try and you never can try
As hard as I try every day

Next time I see you
No guarantees
I can't say I'll be nice
Unless you come flat out and say
"Sorry I've been acting like a jerk"

And then I'll say
"That's okay, me too"
And we'll both laugh and cry
And we'll talk and
Whoops my dream bubble popped

That's never going to happen
Ever
Ever
Ever

You're never going to apologize
We're never going to be the same
So maybe writing all this is pointless
But, Eru, it helps me think

Would you get out of my head?
NOW!?
Thank you.
Augh! And STAY OUT!

I refuse to apologize
Unless you beg
Grovel
I will not be nice like I usually am
.. At least to you

Why do I make exceptions for yoU?
You're nothing special!
You're not even a friend .. not anymore..

Comments

[emmywinner56]

this is really more of a rant, or even just a story, than anything else. but it could be really amazing. you need to refine the emotion so that instead of coming out in one big rush, it leaks out. that'll make it more powerful.keep the raw emotion,just focus it more.3/5.

[Rainbow cat FACE]

this seems more like a rant rather than an actual poem.
and no, poems dont have to rhyme. usually forcing things to rhyme makes it uber suck.

[ElvenFalcon]

'They' have no power over me, Blue eyes smile Thanks for the five !

[bindyblueeyes]

do you usually rhyme casue i don't think you have to rhyme but they seem to think you do but. . . I digress

it's pretty good and expresses the emotion very well

i think i'll give you a . . .

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5/5/

[Mud99]

Ahhh. Another thing of which i am incapable, holding a grudge, I can say there is not a single one of my friends I would not grovel before if it would help. Anger only makes me tired. Your poetry isn't bad though, and it only has to rhyme if you want it to.

[Abbygail0810]

It's out there alright, but try to do some ryhming.
3/5 keep up the good work ^^