My Life

• Artist: skyprincess4evr
• Description: Describes how i feel write now. I know i sound depressed and all, but i sort of am. Writing out my feelings makes me feel a little better. It's another way 2 express myself, I hope u like it and understand me.
  The Cookie Jar Game- If you take a cookie from a jar when u aren't supposed to, yu get in trouble. Instead u blame it on someone else. It's where ppl don't admit 2 the truth and blame it on someone else. Sry if u don't get it, tried my best to explain it.
  
• Date: 02/28/2009
• Tags: anotherpoembyme skyprincess4evr

Tears roll down my rosy cheeks
My sleeves become soaked from wiping my reddened, tear-filled eyes
Eyes swollen and no longer transparent or filled with sunshine because sorrow takes over me
My brain unclear with million of unthinkable thoughts
I wish i could rewind and fast forward my life as if it were a video tape
I wish i could make things better so that the sun would shine through my window another day
The world has come to an end and has closed in on me as if i had committed a crime
Why does life have to be like this?
Why can't i live Up there?
Why am i such a miserable, vulnerable person?
I don't understand.....
Myself...
Anyone...
The world...
No one understands me
No one really cares about me
No one sees the real truth behind me, under my skin, beyond my eyes, into my deep soul
No one sees the two different people I am
Everyone only sees one or the other person
Why is life so unfair?
I wish i could.....
Turn back time...
Make things better...
I wish life was without unhappiness...
Does everyone hate me?
Is the whole world against me?
Or am i against myself?
Am i the one who has done the wrong in my own life..... that i was the one who caused all of this?!?!
The possibility that i am to blame is...
I AM the one who navigates me through MY life
I AM the one responsible for myself and truly ONLY me
Maybe I had treated myself wrong all this time and no one else should be blamed, like in the cookie jar game...

Comments

[skyprincess4evr]

I think i'll change my poem due to your advice! smile

[skyprincess4evr]

thanks for the tip! biggrin

[Sunafire]

I think it would have been presented better, if you had written it in a more interesting way than just a rant. Say perhaps refering your emotions to an animal, or a plant, or even putting it into context.
This way more people will be interested instead of reading something that states the obvious.
Other than that little suggestion, its a good poem! Nice freestyling and adjacency pairs going on biggrin