As I jump

• Artist: xCannibal Kisses
• Description: Random poem I wrote in a moment of bordume...please comment. ^_^
• Date: 02/27/2009
• Tags: jump

The dreams all fade
as I take my turn
Jump off this edge
no time to turn

I can't believe it
even as I fall
I can't believe
I had faith to do it all

But as I fall
they point and laugh
I count the faces
I see them all

None other jumped
they didn't trust
So now I die
alone

Comments

[onionio]

i didn't really like your word choice, but your ideas and metephores were wonderful

[xCannibal Kisses]

Thanks ^_~

[Kitten254]

dude thats really cute! 5/5 dont listen to crayon

[xCannibal Kisses]

I know...I have written better stuff, but I only share my really good poetry with my friends and my boyfriend. Thanks for your opinion ^_~

[ll crayon ll12]

it suck's