My Short Poem Of Dispair

• Artist: My Waffle Licked Me
• Description: this is a huge part of my depression
• Date: 02/24/2009
• Tags: short poem dispair

No one knows. Knows the real me.
As i hide my feelings in deep darkness
You never see.See who i can be
No one Cares.Cares about my life
As they call me out as a friend. But then
They hurt me.As much as a sharp knife
Friends are the most.Mostly Fake.
As they take advantage with their sly
While i give and give all they really do is take.
I am as if the sky.Beautiful but with clouds and tears streaking down my eyes
I cannot control my weather it controls where it takes me
No one knows i like the rain.So no one can see me cry

Comments

[areyououthere]

to trash: Reality is; whether you think it is bleak or not, that's YOUR perspective not OURS.
to poet: red baron said it but missed this; your thing is more like a journal entry than a poem because 1) lacks imagery 2)lacks meter 3)lacks form 4) lacks any other type of poetic tool 5) Too vague and vagueness is not poetic 6) sounds like you're whining and if that is your life then get help

[GenoStar09]

Rain Rain let it pore the more your cry the more they snore
Depression we've heard it all before so why do we continue to ignore,
The signs of the grief seem to linger like the clouds evermore.
Lightening and thunder of frustration scare people into a whirl wind of hate,
But let the rays light shine in your eyes to reveal sunny fate.

If you would like to know what I mean pm me.

[iwant_pxysticks]

WOW!thats how you feel??? i never knew..

[King of Trash]

Depression is the dawning of awareness, and reality is bleak.
I really liked this poem my dear. 5/5.