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what are years but months,
and months are days
as days are hours,
and hours turn to minutes,
turn to seconds.
and what is time,
but a man made prison
set upon himself.
and when we reach the end of our time,
we may ask ourselves,
"was it worth it?"
- Title: Time
- Artist: cutter121
- Description: this is something that I came up with off the top of my head while sitting here bored to death.
- Date: 02/22/2009
- Tags: time
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Nyxs_Ace - 03/01/2009
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a great work. but the ending seems kind of sudden...
perhaps adding on more verse at the end? - Report As Spam
- Paras_Serenity - 02/26/2009
- Hmm... I would tweak with this poem a little bit- I like how you keep listing off units of times until you get down to seconds, but I would recommend tightening the stanzas so that it is one long list that marches downwards (and cut any unnecesary words) and then have the last two stanzas.
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- BulletFMV Fanatic - 02/24/2009
- its worth it with you
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