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A young woman lived out at the sea
Alongside her lover, she was as happy as could be
A storm threatened to break
All hands were awake
The woman stood on the bow
Looking out and uttering, "Wow"
"Such a storm, it'll be"
Her lover said grimly
That night the woman could not sleep
She left the cabin and saw a sight that made her weep
A dirty old boat, ragged and tattered
In the front of the boat; the storm no longer mattered
As she stared in horror a figure formed
On that night, she saw herself, a ghost in the storm
As the wind tossed the waves
The boats met side by side; like a wreck being saved
No one moved until her lover came out
She turned, crying, and he asked, "What's this all about?"
As she pointed, his gaze had followed
The doppelganger just smiled
"Fear not my dears, it will not hurt"
The woman extended a boney hand covered in dirt
The figure's mouth moved, but made no sound
The lovers retreated, spinning around
"I'll protect you always so never forget"
"That promise we made I'll never regret."
They spoke softly
They embraced the rosary
The woman screamed in horror
A hand had entered the foyer
She could not hold him any more
Life drained and his body poor
Soon his flesh was gone and a figure remained
A ghost of her lover, a lover she could never regain
When she returned to the deck
The figure had him around his neck
"Forever love is strong"
"We'll be alive again, it won't be long"
As the woman saw the figures, slowly forming
They were solid, she was not, and she continued mourning
"He was taken by a figure of me"
She sat and cried silently as she disappeared, out at sea.
- by Mizuki Ayu |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/11/2009 |
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- Title: "At Sea"
- Artist: Mizuki Ayu
- Description: "At Sea" was written on whim and I fell in love with it the moment that I finished it. I have thought of extending it into a full story but have yet to act upon it, I'm not really sure if I should. I don't remember when I wrote this, but I'm certain it was around my sophomore year, 2 years ago. I don't intend to explain much, seeing as it is open to interpretation somewhat, but feel free to PM about it.
- Date: 02/11/2009
- Tags: atsea ghost
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Comments (7 Comments)
- HeismyFiyero - 03/26/2009
- Beautifully written and mesmerizing. Gave me goose bumps. <3
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- Happy Sparky - 03/21/2009
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It's a very beautiful story.
I liked the way you first portrayed the ghost as an
antagonist only to reveal that it was actually the girl herself.
I felt kinda surreal when I was reading it. The romantic element combined with horror and mystery created an atmosphere where
the reader has to hold his breath for the next lines. You also made the rhyming fit in pretty well with the poem itself. Definitely, 5 stars. c: - Report As Spam
- tonstaar - 03/19/2009
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Oh. My. Gosh.
That was glorious.
I love it.
5 stars.
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- babyblueai - 03/14/2009
- Wow that was an awsome poem i love it ^-^ a really really great poem... 5 stars
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- Strangled-Decay - 03/06/2009
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Epic.
Beautifully and ultamitely epic
you should be professional.
Id buy your books
* 5 stars* - Report As Spam
- XxFoxblaze_of_RiverClanxX - 02/18/2009
- zomg!! that is amazing!! you should have a career!
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