Time and Love

• Artist: Half Spawn Of Satan
• Description:
• Date: 02/06/2009
• Tags: time love

As I drift though time

Wondering what is important and what is benign

I see your beautiful complection

Staring at me through me selection

That has become my line



Slowly I find what is to true of time

We try to slow it down

Try and make it rhyme

But time is a downward spiral

Just falling like a dime.



No good or bad: No happy or sad

Just a long string of appearant nothing

But in that nothing there is something

For something I will find in my line

You are my special something

You are my love divine

In the eternal emptiness of time.

Comments

[KayleyV2]

Great idea with adequate composition. Your main problem is your spelling. You misspelled a few words, including "apparent" and "complexion." You even used "me" instead of "my". That hurt the poem overall. However, I really like how you intertwined the concept of time and a line throughout the poem. It is a good way to draw everything centrally.

[Rika Nemendi]

Whooo good job person I loved it!