Next to Me

• Artist: Fake Silence
• Description: The first piece of writing from me that actually rhymes...
  
  It's dedicated to the one and only Anonymous aka Guest aka Panda aka Sky aka Nic's BESTEST friend. Yea... She's not here on Gaia, but, it's okay, i sent her a copy via email before this.
  
  Mind rating and leaving a comment? At least, let me know you dropped by~ Thanks ^^
  *smile*
• Date: 01/28/2009
• Tags: next friends

You picked me up when I was broken,
You put me together,
As if I were a jigsaw puzzle,
No one knows me better.

You were there when I need a shoulder.
You were there to share my joy and laughter.
During the times when no one else bothered,
You hugged me over the monitor.
To me, that’s all that ever matters.

Far in distance, you might be.
But by heart, you’re just next to me.

Comments

[Sabriells__whispers]

I really like this. the only thing i didn't enjoy was the ending. the phrasing could use some work. other than that, it was great! 4/5

if you have time, would you mind taking a look at some of my pieces? i am looking for feedback on all of them. smile

[Tahi the Treacherous]

This has some great phrases, and a general idea that is relatable to many.

I would suggest you remove some words. It feels cluttered in some areas.

[yinyangtwinsxss]

ah i can relate to what you wrote, but sadly it ended horribly.

good job though, 4/5

[x not in use x]

*all warm and fuzzy inside*

[P00R L3N0]

i think i'll send this to my best friend : D
she recently moved half the world away. :C
only if you would allow me to though. and of course i'll give you credit.

[nicolegarza]

wow this is so amazing im a writter and you should look into being published seriosly it took me some looking around but it happened to me

[faux_fur_rabbit]

I wish i knew what that was like, to have somebody that loves you for who you are, no matter how far away you two are.