The Girl In white

• Artist: Freaked Glitter
• Description: i really just made this up at the spur-of-the-moment. If you like it, cool. if you don't, thats ok. I don't really do poetry
• Date: 01/21/2009
• Tags: girl white

The girl in white
cried all night.
Never to be seen again.
I saw her once
and wondered who she was.
This guy she meet
broke her heart.
She just lost all hope.
I never thought it would
end this way.
But not everyone gets a happy ending.
Am i right?

Comments

[lil pixy girl]

It's good, but the last line doesn't sound quite right, maybe if you used enjambment leading into it and decapitalised the start of it?

[XxBeautifulxLiesxX]

thts good.i love it.check out some of mine,k?lol.5/5