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Bittersweet Fantasy
by Lyris Mendax
I feel a shiver when you cover me
as you touch places
that should be out of reach
I hide my awe as I look upon you
while you rest in your pristine natural state
I find myself marveling at your delicacy
giving in when challenged by your strength
With eyes closed I enjoy your taste
smiling as it rolls over my tongue
savoring that crisp feeling it leaves in my mouth
sometimes sadden when I can have no more
I have come to love and hate what you are
the calmness you bring, the ugliness you hide
When you are here, I long for you to go
when you are gone, I wish for your return
What a wonder you are ..freshly fallen snow.
- by Lyris Mendax |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/15/2008 |
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- Title: Bittersweet Fantasy
- Artist: Lyris Mendax
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Description:
I wrote this on a whim and some good friends helped me name it.
(If you like it let me know if you hate it let me know why, because feedback for a writer is a step on the road to improvement. ) - Date: 12/15/2008
- Tags: bittersweet fantasy
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Comments (3 Comments)
- lizardman9 - 05/29/2009
- i like and i hate 5/5
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- Ark the Guardian - 12/15/2008
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1 star(s) originality
2 star(s) technique
0 star(s) stanza rhyming
1 star(s) mechanics
1 star(s) vocabulary
5/5
comments: Great use of suggestive vocabulary - Report As Spam
- Dragonmight - 12/15/2008
- Like I said I love it. It lets you think one thing till the end and then changes The name fits better.
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