I've Grown Silent

• Artist: greenshock792
• Description: i wrote this when i was a little sad obviously... well i hope somebody likes it ^^
• Date: 12/13/2008
• Tags: grown silent

it seems in this cruel world that i have grown silent,



i no longer speak like i did or say what i used to...



i wander the dark halls of my soul without a light lit,



and stay invisible as people walk by like they always do...



my mouth opens, but i hear no sound



the ice from your cold shoulder has rubbed off on me



i close my mouth full of disapointment and numbness all around



and only watch silently as you turn and walk away from me



with your back turned a tear escapes my eye



but there is no sound from which is my cry...



silent i stand in my own little world looking farther then i should



in search of someone with the right set of ears



looking through an hour glass how silent and still i stood



i will keep searching for the one to dry my tears



but how difficult it is with my being so silent, so quiet



no one hears me, not one single soul in the abyss of the world



i continue my journey to my goal, i will still try it



it's like i'm trapped in silence and nothing i do makes a sound no matter how hard its hurled



how alone i feel, shivers crawl down my spine no smile on my face



no sound in my world, people think me a brute



they think i dont let them in, buts its that there is no space...



my scream is fully drowned in my world that is mute



the emptyness in my eyes describes vaguely what i say



but you cant tell becuase of how cloudy they are...



i think destiny controls my fate, that its pulling me further away,



further to the haziness that surrounds the star...



the star that is my only sight on hope to go where i used to be



but now that i am so far away i no longer feel that i can find it,



my faith is lost, my hopes and all my senses except for my ability to see



and what i see is that,i've grown much to silent....

Comments

[un3dead3spirit3]

I love it, I understand it, and I agree that you should take out a couple spaces between each line, theres too much space. 5/5 tho

[Shanra the Dragon Bard]

First of all, get rid of all the spaces between the lines. Then capitalize your words and put punctuation in so we know where one sentence ends and the next begins. The concept is good, but your form is atrocious. If you're going to submit something here, you should make it as good as you can. You have spelling errors too. Good, but sloppy.