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pixels in my mind
they play and dance with my time
collide in the sky
- Title: untitled
- Artist: pcberdwin
- Description: a quick haiku
- Date: 12/11/2008
- Tags: untitledhaikupixelspixel
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Comments (6 Comments)
- falloutboyfalloutboy - 12/20/2008
- OH!!! THIS IS JUST AH-MAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! FIVE ALL THE WAY!!! You inspired me to eat some ice cream!!!
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- pcberdwin - 12/14/2008
- such lack of imagination.. sigh
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- Cottoncandyocbra3 - 12/14/2008
- This is a weak haiku, and seems to not flow with imagery. Haiku do not need to be about nature, and can be about any topic you desire, but it needs to fit in a logical set of imagery/ideas... 2/5.
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- dreamheartnz - 12/13/2008
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a haiku is genrally about natural things, not the internet....
and not alot of flow or staying on the small topic needed for a haiku, i don't really like it at all sorry, 1/5 - Report As Spam
- pcberdwin - 12/11/2008
- kinda slips through your fingers like jello rather than flow eh? razz
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- conceptually_concrete - 12/11/2008
- Haiku is one of my favorite styles of poetry, and I like the idea of this one. However, a haiku doesn't flow that well when it rhymes.
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