Reaching

• Artist: dark eclipse
• Description: Just something I wrote yesterday that I want some feedback on. ^_^
  Please comment.
• Date: 12/02/2008
• Tags: reaching

Reaching up and out
Leaves the mid range open
For tearing in or out
The words yet unspoken
Sinew stretching reach
Bone popping grasp
And yet the hands still empty
Silent voice worn to rasp
Leaning, leaning outward
Screaming, screaming in
Boiling, straining fluids
Stretching, tearing skin
And out and out and skyward
But away from pumping thin
Searching up and outward
Neglects the one within

Comments

[acid elyse]

I lik3 dis. Sommuch. The imagery is so raw and that is all I see. Well written. You should publish or sumfing.

[dark eclipse]

I like that interpretation. =]

[chirpysmom]

I think I uneerstan what this is about . . . either way I really like it. To me, it seems to be about helping others so much that you neglect yourself, but poetry rarely has one definite meaning. I think the part I like the best is the violence of it. It's so in-your-face that it's subtle.