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Time and time again.
I hear your voice when im trying to sleep.
And it kills me.
Because i need you and i dont know what to do its just i need you.
Im back here walking these streets.
Wondering where you are.
I know i shouldnt but i guess its to hard for me to move on.
And i need you and i dont know what to do its just i need you.
Sometimes i fly sometimes fall but in the end your my all...................
And i need you and i dont know what to do its just i neeeeeeeeed..........you.................. .
- by Tears Bartholomew |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/01/2008 |
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- Title: I Need You
- Artist: Tears Bartholomew
- Description: Its a song i wrote myself its not perfect because its one of my firsts and i just hope you like it
- Date: 12/01/2008
- Tags: need
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Lost Kanae - 03/20/2009
- your second to last line- the 'your' should be "you're". and i pretty much second the previous comment. i like your ideas and the pictures you're trying to creat but perhaps delve into it a little more. create more imagery or find deeper ways to phrase each lyric. overall good intent though. i connect very deeply with what you wrote, as i've been going through a rough patch lately myself, so should you seek to improve this piece i'd be glad to help;just drop by my profile
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- Sex With A Blender - 12/01/2008
- Oh-kay I liked it but I would like it better if you would capitalize the I's and put some apostrophies in there. and at he end don't add a bunch of E's to need.
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