My Dear

• Artist: SilentJ75
• Description: So this is the second part of my seasons poems. If you have not read the first part(A Big Rock) you should, but it's not necessary to read them in order so don't worry too much about it.
  This is my personal favorite out of the four poems. It is also the first one I wrote and it inspired me to write the other 3(A Big Rock, Fire in the Cold, and Thoughts of Spring). Please read the others as well, I'll submit them when I can.
• Date: 12/01/2008
• Tags: dear

Don’t change, my dear.
Keep your eyes bright and innocent,
your golden-brown hair short,
with a smile carved in stone.
Go back to when your heart was carefree,
back, before you realized you were lonely.

I don’t want this nostalgia to last forever.
No,
instead let me live in this memory
I won’t move forward, I’ll stay with you.
Please, don’t change, my dear.

Don’t be like autumn
as it plays its sweet song of death;
turn the trees to twilight.
Gold, amber, crimson red
paint the earth in shades of sunset.

How is it one can be so beautiful
as it dies?
Beautiful but terrible,
which is why I am begging you, my dear
Do not let time carry you down its raging river.
Stay young forever, my dear.

Comments

[xXHARMONIC blADE Xx]

i really liked the poem. idc what the other guy said.

[Tinya]

*sees karasureign's comment* ^^ I'm glad you found this, Tsu. It gave me the opportunity to read it! I really liked it, the imagery was totally great, and though the flow was a bit off, it didn't really affect it in my opinion. Wonderful job, dear. 5/5

[Tsume Rokaro]

Where are the comments? It does deserve some praise here. I do like it, though with my head, the flow is choppy at times. Of course, I shouldn't be one to talk, since my free verse isn't exactly well measure. ^^;

But I do like it. Lots of feeling here. 5/5

[SilentJ75]

I'm not really feeling the love, you guys. =P
Please comment. Pretty pleeeeeeaase. =D