on the wall

• Artist: X-Shallow_Grave-X
• Description: ok this one suxs
• Date: 11/30/2008
• Tags: wall

ill write my name upon my wall,
with so many tears i have shed,
as my body takes its fall.
you shall know now that i am dead.

i thought i was happy in my life,
yet it was all a lie,
till that girl stabbed my heart with a knive.
i saw the truth and i begin to cry.

knowing that no one cares about me,
i just wanna wither away,
they will never know of all the pain i see.
as my will to life was crushed on that day.

as i write name i shed crimson tears,
now im motionless on the floor,
bring alive all my fears.
with my blood across my bedroom door

Comments

[Cuteh_Bootay_Kimi]

I really liked it. It was very very good, I liked your use of words, description, and the visual image you were trying to create. It was highly interesting, and intriguing. Nice job.

[S5 Spike]

no it doesn't suck.
I thought it was very good actually.

[Suicidal_Panda15]

Hmmm...interesting. I liked your choice of words and the emotions it transmitted.

[The Gray Rose]

nice poem, a little depressing but i like that. "snap" "snap" lol

[xKristellex]

kinda scarey sad but its interesting
4/5

[Rikkeasha]

hm this one is interesting
worries me a bit
but good^^
deffinately good hun <3