it was him?

• Artist: Emo-princess45
• Description: i made this poem up with my BFFL and she told me i soo should submit it in the arena so i hoped you like it its sortta short
• Date: 11/27/2008
• Tags: love

poem by emily a.k.a princess


the days shine with brightness
the nights shine with fear
then no one can really hear
my screams of fear as he climbs up my window
to calm me down as if i didn't know how
he whispered to me calm and softly "hunnie dont worry its all over now"
i didnt know if it was him the guy in my heart dreams and soul but i will wait to
talk to him at school. That day at school i was terrified and shocked to know it was him who climbed into my window who comforted me he rocked! So i found out one thing that he loved me more than i loved him he said to me that i was his world and we lived on with our lives as if that night never happened. crying

i so hope you like my poem thank you for reading it.

Comments

[Spontaneously Spazgasmic]

If you bffl made it then why did you say your poem silly girl. lol

[Emo-princess45]

my bffl made it lmao ill tell her though

[MUSIC_IS_FOR3V3R]

it was alright

[pretty_face4life]

I am very confused, but it isn't terrible.

[-0-Momoki-0-]

The line '.... who climbed into my window who comforted me he rocked!' is also very confusing because it doesent make any sense. I am getting this vibe that this was a rape scene but usually rape victims dont want to face their rapist so did she confront him or did he confront her? All in all it is very good but try spending more time on ur structer of wording because many parts of ur writing piece left me confused :S

[-0-Momoki-0-]

Ummm, the concept is really good but I find it kind of confusing... In the very begining u say 'the days shine with brightness... the nights shine with fear' so I figure this is an on-going thing but then u say ' we lived on with our lives as if that night never happend'. So was it for many nights this was going on or for one night?