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my love for you will not die
unlike a rose it will not wither and i will not lie
as long as your heart is strong and pure
and remember that paitence is a virtue
then ill live and wait for you
because i will always love you
- by Celtic_RosePetal |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/21/2008 |
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- Title: love
- Artist: Celtic_RosePetal
- Description: i wrotw this for someone i dearly love
- Date: 09/21/2008
- Tags: love
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Comments (7 Comments)
- NoMoreChibiFox - 03/27/2009
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i know who this was 4
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- Vampyro_Undead_Sovereign - 01/14/2009
- that is really pretty i like it.
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- xXOMGitsloveXx - 12/31/2008
- Nice, but yes, you should work on your grammaring. =] 5/5
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- Black_Wilted_Roses - 09/21/2008
- Damn, your grammar sucks.
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- Evil_Genius_Chemist - 09/21/2008
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its good
to you pretty hate machine roses will lie.
they will give you false hope of forever and then they die on you and you feel sad, like a failing relationship, wich is what she is probbally trying to say. - Report As Spam
- iluvpolkadots - 09/21/2008
- Yeah. The unlike a rose..its got an okay concept, work with it. Rhymes can be hard, and sometimes, its okay not to rhyme if it doesnt make sense.
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- pretty hate machine - 09/21/2008
- The line "unlike a rose it will not wither and I will not lie," doesn't really fit. I understand you were trying to end the line it something that rhymed (this is the main reason why I hate writing rhyme scheme poems, myself ^^ wink , but it's like you're saying roses will lie to you, and it just doesn't seem to fit. Other than that I think this was a wonderful poem. <3
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