Superficial

• Artist: Lets Get Deadly
• Description: I really like this poem, and I wrote it about two months ago. Please, comment if you like it, and constructive-criticism is more than welcome, but heavily encouraged!
• Date: 09/06/2008
• Tags: superficial

Wash away all of my impurities,
My unsubstantial abilities
Scrub everything away
In an attempt to make me "clean"
Scrape everything away
Until it makes me bleed
Never stopping
Never slacking
You keep on going
Until I'm lacking
Lacking a cause
Lacking a soul
And having no means of thinking for myself
These are your thoughts
This is your blood
Lost is the person that I was once
Left is the image of something I will never be

Comments

[Lady Hetfield]

I like that, it makes me form an interesting mental picture. I wish I could give you a 10, but there is only a 5 > biggrin so 5/5!

[devine_preistess31]

i like it. sounds like somthing my friends might wright. yay another mind like ours! oh and first commment